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1- The Creation of the Universe and the Birth of the Alicorn Gods


In the beginning, there was nothing but empty darkness. There was no time, no sun or moon, and no ponies. But one day, if you could call it a day, there was a tremendous explosion of light brighter then anything that had ever been or ever will be and out of the Light came two alicorns. The first was named Uronus and the second was named Geia. Both alicorns looked around at the space the Light had made and both set forth to explore this universe. Uronus created the abstract side of the universe, taming the storms of magic that were leftover from the Great explosion of Light and distributing it evenly across the universe. Geia created the physical side of the universe, making meteors that turned into planets and making the stars and moons. The alicorns looked at their work and were pleased and both alicorns knew each other and by doing so begated more alicorns to wonder the universe. These alicorns were born with unique abilities such as Cronus's ability to master time and Hermercury's gift for speed. But when the two parent alicorns looked upon their children, they had realize that they were missing three more. One alicorn to control the rising and setting of the sun, one alicorn to control the rising and setting of the moon, and one alicorn to control the uncontrollable forces of chaos. And so it came to pass that both alicorns knew each other once more and two alicorns emerged out of Geia's womb. The first alicorn that emerge was a white alicorn with a pink mane and a cutie mark of a sun on her flank. This one was named Celestia. The second alicorn that emerge was a blue unicorn with a mane of stars and a cutie mark of a crescent moon on her flank. This one was named Luna. But when the third alicorn was to be made, Geia wanted the god of chaos to have a special uniqueness that would make him stand out from the others. So for the third alicorn, Geia bestowed upon him the right arm of a lion, the left claw of an eagle, the right leg of a lizard, and the left leg of a goat. In addition, he was given a bat's right wing, a Pegasus' left wing, and a snake's tail, along with two horns upon his equine head. This one was named Discord. Then the parent alicorns constructed an immense palace of gold and silver for their children to live in and they named it Olympia. The two parents then took leave of their children in order to maintain the balance of the universe and by doing so left them to their own devices..




This is the first chapter of what I consider to be a fan-fic of epic proportions. As you can tell, it is written in a very old style of speaking similar to the Bible and like the Bible from my perspective, it is a series of events that did happen, but not in the way it is written in this text. I really hope you guys like this story and hope for it's continuation.
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:iconihadnothingbetter2do:
What in the name of the motherland is this?

And all those hidden comments, can't take criticism I see hmm?
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:icondisneymaster:
DisneyMaster Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Not when it turns into pure meanness.
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:iconihadnothingbetter2do:
I don't beleive that meanness is a word comrade, learn2grammers.

And this is exactly the type of criticism one should expect if they are to produce fiction of this type, it is usually hard to find work that has not been put down due to the fact that it's contents are stupid to the reader, even harder if it references religion.
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Anunymau5 Featured By Owner May 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
OOOOOOOH! THE CRINGE!
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:icondisneymaster:
DisneyMaster Featured By Owner May 20, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
What's wrong this time?
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:iconanunymau5:
Anunymau5 Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The cringe.... It burns.
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:icondisneymaster:
DisneyMaster Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
What cringe?
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Anunymau5 Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ugh... Didn't think I would need to spell it out for you but seeing as you're a misogynistic asswad I might as well. This. Story. Makes. Me. Cringe. It transcends fanfiction and just becomes a living tangent. A metaphysical manifestation of your mind. Something no one want's to read or even listen to.
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:icondisneymaster:
DisneyMaster Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
How do you know people don't want to read what's on my mind?
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:iconanunymau5:
Anunymau5 Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Because most people don't like neurotic misogynistic sociopaths?
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